MEMORY OF MINE :D
I have a lot of memory about Cat Tien; it was my first trip that I went to in school. I miss the nature and the fresh air in the morning. I miss everything, I enjoyed every single minute as I went there. It’s so quiet there, and everything seems very peaceful. As we arrived there it became more crowded.
I remember the most when we waste our time walked for 5km just to see a blank river with no crocodile. Then we had to walk for 5 more km just to get back. While we were on our way to the river, we got very tired. We didn’t have much water but we had lot of food. We also sang as we walked, it helped us forget the tiredness. At first we were in a big group but then we got slipped apart because some were way up front and some couldn’t catch up. It was exhausted but bough me a best memory.
Another awesome memory that I had was the camp fire. It was my first camp; I got to eat marshmallow and dancing around the fires. The boys were on one side and the girls were on the other side both did different thing. Girls were singing and dancing while boys were playing a game as they jumped over each other’s head. Some other were eating marshmallow, sitting around the fire, talking….etc.
This was my best trip ever; I want to go back in time when we first step on the bus. I miss the trip so much, I miss everything so much. I can stay there forever with my friends, or even live there. I hope someday I can have a trip like that but longer.
For the word choice i think i didnt used much interesting words in my paragraph. I didnt want to use too much complicated words because it might make the reader hard to understand. With my level of english right now that is the best i can do. I only used normal words but i did used them well in my sentence.
ReplyDeleteWith my sentences fluence are pretty good. I used comma and write in complete sentences. I also know how to connect sentence together to make them all relate and make sense.
I organize my story very well, I separate them into paragraph. Each paragraph has different idea and they all relate to each other.
About proofreading somehow my grammar might be a problem. I might not used them not right way or uncorrect. The spelling is also good but there might be 1 or 2 will be uncorrect.
I think you did a great job on make the paragraph influence. Your grammar need alot of help. Your spelling is all correct and you know how to connection sentences together. Great job Sel
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